Hi Imogen, how beautiful this is - there is a gentleness to your description of the melancholy that is particularly compelling. Lines like "my psychologist is kind, but I'm not sure what else she can do for me" really hits. It's the kind of struggle where you're not even avoiding help, there is just nothing to do but return to the ocean. "like gravity decided today I am all it wants." is one of the most beautiful descriptions of depression, that really resonates. I see a lot of myself in this, and I can imagine many, many people will too! Especially the affinity with the ocean....I so often just want to submerge.
I'm so curious about how this excerpt fits into the larger flow of your story, what the journey is, where it begins, takes us, ends. I wonder about what's rooting us through these visceral and relatable descriptions of how it all feels. I'm imagining a braid, and I see the side two threads so clearly and I'm left wondering about the middle one. I hope this thought/question is helpful in some way!!!
Um this is the most thoughtful, kind, beautiful response to my writing. It's also so useful and allows me to kind of step back from it in a way I haven't been able to before. Thank you thank you!!
Thank you - this is both beautiful and painful. A friend of 27 years did something horrible to me a few weeks ago that ended our friendship. Yet. We had this beautiful moment of calm by the ocean just hours before. It's the sound filling my ears and the juxtaposition in your words that is compelling. I do hope you keep writing as it was meaningful for me to read. Hugz.
I'm so so sorry about your recent experience with your friend. There is nothing more painful than a close friend doing something terrible to you. I hope that you are getting lots of love from the people around you xx
And thank you for engaging with my work so beautifully, there is so much more of the story!
Reading this at a time where so much of this resonates with me. “It feels like a vacuum at my nostrils. Sucking the feeling of tears into my sinuses but nothing erupts. Like constantly holding onto a breath.” is especially vivid in my mind and made me exhale to remember to breathe. Your writing is beautifully descriptive, it draws me in & I definitely want to read more. Don’t give up with publishing, these things take time.
Hi Imogen, how beautiful this is - there is a gentleness to your description of the melancholy that is particularly compelling. Lines like "my psychologist is kind, but I'm not sure what else she can do for me" really hits. It's the kind of struggle where you're not even avoiding help, there is just nothing to do but return to the ocean. "like gravity decided today I am all it wants." is one of the most beautiful descriptions of depression, that really resonates. I see a lot of myself in this, and I can imagine many, many people will too! Especially the affinity with the ocean....I so often just want to submerge.
I'm so curious about how this excerpt fits into the larger flow of your story, what the journey is, where it begins, takes us, ends. I wonder about what's rooting us through these visceral and relatable descriptions of how it all feels. I'm imagining a braid, and I see the side two threads so clearly and I'm left wondering about the middle one. I hope this thought/question is helpful in some way!!!
Cheering you on!
Um this is the most thoughtful, kind, beautiful response to my writing. It's also so useful and allows me to kind of step back from it in a way I haven't been able to before. Thank you thank you!!
I'm so so glad it's helpful!!! <3
Thank you - this is both beautiful and painful. A friend of 27 years did something horrible to me a few weeks ago that ended our friendship. Yet. We had this beautiful moment of calm by the ocean just hours before. It's the sound filling my ears and the juxtaposition in your words that is compelling. I do hope you keep writing as it was meaningful for me to read. Hugz.
I'm so so sorry about your recent experience with your friend. There is nothing more painful than a close friend doing something terrible to you. I hope that you are getting lots of love from the people around you xx
And thank you for engaging with my work so beautifully, there is so much more of the story!
😭😭😭😭 stunning work!
Reading this at a time where so much of this resonates with me. “It feels like a vacuum at my nostrils. Sucking the feeling of tears into my sinuses but nothing erupts. Like constantly holding onto a breath.” is especially vivid in my mind and made me exhale to remember to breathe. Your writing is beautifully descriptive, it draws me in & I definitely want to read more. Don’t give up with publishing, these things take time.